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Long Way Down, page 39

15th Jun 2015, 9:15 PM in Long Way Down
Long Way Down, page 39

Author Notes

Zomburai 15th Jun 2015, 9:15 PM edit delete
Zomburai
Well, so much for the Monday update (for those of you a few time zones ahead of me! :P).

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I edited out a couple of scenes earlier in the chapter because I didn't think they were adding any new information, and I'm really beginning to think that was a mistake. Specifically, they flesh out both Bethany and Nick adapting to their budding relationship. And I'm not sure how to handle that realization. Thoughts?

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No page next week ... real life is catching up hardcore and I know already I'm not going to have the page done in time. (Largely because my entire weekend will be spent driving to and from my hometown, but at least I get to see my family). Sorry, guys, I know that the constant stops and the slowing of the update schedule is making this thing drag. :C

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That's all for now. See you in two weeks!


Comments


KarToon12 16th Jun 2015, 7:09 AM edit delete reply
KarToon12
It's up to you, but I'd say to leave the scenes in, because then we care about them more when bad things happen to them. Not every single page has to be advancing the plot. If you don't advance the plot, then you can at least develop the characters.
Zomburai 16th Jun 2015, 8:18 AM edit delete reply
Zomburai
Ah, but that's the trouble ... those pages should have been like twelve pages ago XD Hence why I'm not sure what I'm going to do with them.
Theeds 16th Jun 2015, 5:00 PM edit delete reply
Well, I don't know quite how this story is gonna go. I'm gonna presume not well. If so, you could throw one of those budding relationship scenes at the end, when alls said and done. Like a scene of Bethany and Nick having it out about his violent methods intercut with him dragging his bloody maimed body across the floor. Follow it up with them making up (or out), thinking everything's gonna be alright. Cue Nick falling to the floor in present day. Toss in a scene with Ms. Kane in which Nick explains how he became the man he is today. Cue Nick fading away into nothingness. End scene.

No poetry today. I got nothing right now.
Zomburai 16th Jun 2015, 5:35 PM edit delete reply
Zomburai
You've been going at the poetry thing for long enough and with such dedication you've earned a break :P
Delta-v 22nd Jun 2015, 6:31 AM edit delete reply
The timestream in this arc has been a bit...... elastic...... anyway. Just put a date banner on those scenes and put them anywhere you want. :)